The Difference Between the Right Word and the Almost Right Word

One thing I forgot to mention in yesterday’s post (More About Adverbs) is that when you use a thesaurus to replace a word in your writing, you have to be careful not to change its original meaning. No two words in the world mean the exact same thing – that’s why they are different words. Even “he shouted” and “he yelled” have slightly different connotations. But more often than not, that slight difference in meaning doesn’t matter, and you can interchange those words throughout your writing.

But there are times when the thesaurus gives you a word that doesn’t make sense in your context, or, even if it does make sense, it chops up your writing instead of letting it flow.

Example: Her heart was pounding. “Are you sure?” she asked.

A thesaurus option: Her heart was pounding. “Are you sure?” she inquired.

Okay, so they mean the same thing. “To ask” is the same as “to inquire.” But “inquired” sounds so unnatural and awkward. Especially in this context. Her heart is pounding, right? That implies suspense. So, picture your reader, rushing through the pages of your book, wanting so badly to know what happens next- and then you throw in a word like “inquire.” What’s your reader going to think? What the heck? Yeah, that’s about right.

“Inquire” sounds so formal and awkward. It’s not right when you’ve got hearts pounding and action going on. The word jolts your readers and almost pulls them out of the world of your book. It reminds them that it’s not real. You do not want to do that to your readers.

Usually, it’s really easy to tell what sounds weird and what sounds right. When you let other people read your work, they will tell you as well. But here’s a general rule of thumb that I follow when using a thesaurus: If I’ve never heard the word in my life, I don’t use it. To me, when I use a thesaurus, I look at the words and think, Oh! That’s right! I completely forgot about those words! Or I think, Yes! That’s the word I was looking for! The thesaurus is really more to jog my memory than to learn new words. But I’m not saying that you should never use new words- it’s just that if you do, make sure you look them up in the dictionary and are completely sure about the meaning. Don’t pull them straight from the thesaurus. It also helps if you look at examples that use the word in a sentence.

Even the way a word sounds can determine whether you should use it or not, even if it has the meaning you’re looking for. Did you know that the word “pulchritudinous” means “beautiful”? If a guy had called me that and I hadn’t known what it meant, I think I’d have hit him!

Edit: The title of this post is part of a quote by Mark Twain. Check out the Quotes About Writing page to read the full quote!

More About Adverbs

Upon request, I’m writing another post about adverbs and verbs. I hope you find it helpful!

Most adverbs end with -ly. Quickly, sadly, awfully, angrily, happily, softly, loudly. These are all adverbs. Well, imagine reading something like this:

Example: Slowly, he walked towards her. Although he was walking slowly, his thoughts were moving quickly through his mind. Was he making the right choice? He began walking more quickly, began walking briskly towards the girl. She was waiting for him, and as he drew nearer she called his name.

Yikes. Did you count the adverbs in that paragraph? There are five. Doesn’t it sound cluttered? Too much -ly. Now read this version:

Revised version: He walked towards her, lingering every so often along the way. Although he hesitated, thoughts whirled through his mind like a furious cyclone. Was he making the right choice? He quickened his pace, now striding towards the girl. She was waiting for him, and as he drew nearer she called his name.

You may have noticed that I didn’t just cut out the adverbs. I made the paragraph a little more descriptive and threw in a simile that wasn’t there before. Do you know why? Because once you cut out unnecessary adverbs, you have room for better writing!

But sometimes you will not find a verb that can get rid of your adverb. And that’s okay. Sometimes an adverb is simply what fits best and makes the most sense.

If you’re having trouble deciding when to use adverbs and when not to, try using thesaurus.com. I generally keep it open on my computer whenever I’m writing anything. It’s quite useful. I just typed in “walk slowly” and it gave me synonyms!

I hope this post was helpful and clarified anything that wasn’t explained in my previous adverb post. If you have any questions, leave them in a comment!